Tonight, I worked on the second version of the story I told in my Advanced Storytelling Class last week. I’ve changed the title from “Military School” to “My Dad’s Story.” You’ll see why when you view it — I’ve taken out the beginning anecdote and replaced it with something more related to the theme.
I’ve also tried to follow some of the critiques from last week. I avoided, as best I could, any set-ups to moments; I tried to start each new scene right where I (or my Dad) was, without the benefits of hindsight.
Here is the video. Enjoy!